The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this well written piece. The ending said it all. Nicely done.

God bless~
Happy to see you back! Always enjoy your stories, and this is wonderful . . .
Huh, really enjoyed it. Didn't personally see many red ink moments, but could throw this in... Just be careful of adding too many characters in too short a story. No need to interact with the boys here, develop your other characters in what little space you have. That's what we relate to more than a storyline. Saying that I don't really think it was an issue here, but it could easily have be come one. Just be aware I guess.

Bless you heaps!
The fatigue the mother felt transcended to this reader (trying to keep up with two two-year-olds! -- phew!) You had some touching moments throughout. I could see these two little "angels" sleeping in their beds. :)
Your descriptions ring true. I enjoyed this slice-of-life story. Well done
I enjoyed this story and I was engaged from beginning to end.

Your description of the fire left me with questions---which might not have been your intent.

Otherwise it is a good story.
A well written story with lots of detail to bring it to life. Enjoyed it.
A great story and very moving. I loved the dialog which was very realistic.

Blessings, Graham
A special moment in time well written. Good job.
Fabulous re entry into Challenge land!
So simple and so captivating. I enjoyed it.