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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Barbeque/Cookout (09/06/12)
I’m not a white European American.., I’m an American. I have a close friend whose son is dating a black girl who was adopted by a white family. They are not a cross cultural family, they are an American family.

One of my best friends in high school was an American who just happened to be of Mexican descent. Yes I said Mexican!

Nearly half of my unit in the army was filled with Black and Hispanic men who shared our common language of freedom, and yes, they were Americans too. In fact, at one point, I had a Black Platoon Sergeant working for me and I in turn was working for a Black Colonel. Did I mention that all three of us were Americans, and we got along fine.

One of my direct ancestors fought in the Union Army during the Civil War for the cause of ending slavery for our Black brothers and sisters. Thousands upon thousands of these Union soldiers gave their lives so Blacks could be free of their chains.

And because of this sacrifice of mostly white Americans, we now have a completely free and integrated society where even a Black American can be the President of the United States.

So please, can we stop with all of the racist and divisive politics that is currently erasing much of our gains in this area. I and my fellow Americans are tired of it.

Recently, at our church cookout was a young Black man and his White wife who are members of our mostly White church. He has this peculiar habit of hugging everyone he meets, and you know what, I like that kid, he’s a great American!
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Terry Lee
09/13/12
This is a powerful piece. I find that persuasive essays do best when they present an issue with as little specific instructions to the reader as possible, letting the reader come up with his/her own conclusion on how to proceed.

You do this brilliantly throughout the essay, except for the second to last paragraph. I would suggest that the second to last paragraph is unnecessary, because the point has already been made clear throughout the rest of the piece. In fact, the writing was strong, impactful, and clear, and the call to action was obvious, without being mentioned.

C D Swanson 
09/14/12
Good job with the topic that was subtle in its approach, and yet prolific in its message.

Nicely done. God bless~
Seema Bagai
09/14/12
This piece has a strong, clear message. However, I could not see how it fits with this week's topic (except mentioning it in passing at the end). Otherwise, this is well-written.
Lynn Smith
09/17/12
Nice message, one that most of us need to hear. I just don't see it being on topic except for the little mention of a cookout in the end. But over all it was a good story.

God bless.