The Official Writing Challenge
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It's definitely an interesting story. I followed most of it, but was a bit confused here and there. I like your description of hell-a place where God can't reach them. As not having contact with God would be the most horrific hell imaginable. I feel there was more to the story that I wasn't quite getting, but that could just be me. Keep writing.
I was confused. Not so much bored, but definitely confused. ;)

No seriously, I could see what was going on, though I don't believe that there are ghosts or spirits (other than demons) wandering the universe. But the concept can make interesting stories.
I tried to read this~ and after the first couple paragraphs of not being able to follow you I did not finish. I may come back at a later time and try to catch on to where you were going with this.