The Official Writing Challenge
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09/13/05
Beautifully written! I love the thought of this life being but a temporary Bon Voyage
09/13/05
A beautiful story. You have clearly presented a man of faith, humour and love and the rich relationship he had with his daughter. The details of the pot are also a wonderful affirmation of her love for her mother. I particularly like the contrasting turn her life will now take; from coast to desert.
09/14/05
Be careful of it's / its and use of sentence fragments. A touching story, written with peace and affection. Lovely.
09/17/05
How nice. Very touching. Well polished. Good use of language, etc.
09/21/05
Nina, this was a really lovely entry and I wanted you to know that you made it into the semi-finals. In fact, you placed 12th overall - quite an achievement when you consider how many entries there were across all the levels. The ending was a little predictable (or perhaps I'm just able to pick them easily these days), but that didn't detract from what was a very special story. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)