The Official Writing Challenge
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I think you had a great story to tell here, but it was difficult to read. If you'd used more conventional storytelling, I think your point would have come across more readily. The caps and ellipses are distracting. I think you had something important to say, though.
I thought your story was interesting, and I understand the frustration and charactorization, but hard to get through because of the capital lettering. I noticed a few spelling errors also. I think the anger showed through with using all caps. Keep writing. God bless ya, littlelight