The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/09
A fun change of pace--we don't often get futuristic fiction here.

I wasn't really clear on the nature of the conflict. Did they kill the ambassador simply because he wanted to sit elsewhere? And why will the conflict be played out again? I'll have to read this through again to see what I missed...

Intriguing, like an episode of 'The Twilight Zone'.
06/01/09
Very creative allegory here with a nice contrast between dark/evil and light/good! I didn't catch on until about half-way through, and then the descriptions and the action made sense!

Good job! :)