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Precious. I wondered where the family was from and thought the grandfather may have come from overseas, but wasn't expecting the ending. Enjoyed reading the story. :)
Excellent writing--I loved everything about this entry.
This is excellent! And so beautifully told!
I got goosebumps at the end...really makes me appreciate what we have...great job...
Wonderful story...loved it.
Great read. Loved it from start to finish.
I wondered where this was going. The ending did not disappoint. Well done.
Oh my, this is wonderful! Really well done.

And because I am trying to leave a little critique as well in my comments, I will say that I would cut the words "woefully" and the sentence "Her father had died when she was just a baby, this was the first great tragedy of her young life." You use words like raking sobs, gasping, sobbing, tragedy, woeful but what I think would be better is for Leisel to have some inner dialog on her way to Gran-papa *showing* WHY this is such a trauma to her. Just a thought.

Thank you for sharing this story. Great job! :)
Carol, I'm ging to feature this poignant story in the Front Page Showcase for the week of February 16th. Look for it on the FaithWriters home page, and congratulations!
This is a great story that begins with the title! Congrats on having this showcased on the Frontpage!