The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a very interesting one-sided conversation… that tells a whole story. Your story made me sad… that for whatever reason your MC had no love for his Mom. I'm not one of those "shrink-types" so I'm afraid I can't analyze why. This did make me think. In light of your story, you title is good.
Picture three Judges; Randy says "Nice job", Paula says "I liked it", and Simon says..."With no quotation marks of who was saying what...I didn't read past the third paragraph."

I take the 5th, when it comes to who I "ditto".
Other than the fact that the quotations were missing, it would have been nice to at least introduce who he was speaking to at least once. I like that you didn't go the typical way on a piece about "mother." This is actually good, fix a few things here and there and you have a good entry.