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This is a delightful story! Your ‘hook’ is great. What question will the kids ask that will have even the most intelligent parents flummoxed? I also love the illustration of the ring. And curious kids vying for attention works well. It has a lovely colloquial tone. The story is layered. Yes there’s a lesson to be learnt about God being eternal but also we see a functioning family, a parent who spend quality and quantity time with her kids, takes the time to pick up on the ‘lessons’ and to challenge inappropriate behaviour. Great effort.
"The kids thought I’d gone potty" Ha! Loved that line. We don't say that in the U.S. (at least I've never heard it :-)). Kids do come up with funny stuff don't they? You handled this scene well with the ring illustration. I enjoyed your entry very much. Great job!
Blessings, Lynda
Cute, nicely done.
This is a very fun read. I'll have to remember the ring demonstration in case the subject ever comes up.
Cute story! Baking a cake every day sounds good to me! :-)
You captured a spontaniously special day with the kids very well! Good job.
The title hooked me. Excellent way to draw me in!
A very tender piece, showing how wise our children can be. Very well written. It is always a treat to read your from your skilled pen!