The Official Writing Challenge
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Love the repetition of the verse, and the wonderful images in each stanza. Your last stanza is also a gem! This is convicting on so many levels - and masterfully crafted.
Excellent poetry, with everything a good poem should have--very effective use of repetition, too.
Oh, this was great. I loved it.

The only thing I might suggest is to tie in that last stanza to the others by changing the line "His heart is sad" a bit and adding it to the end. Maybe to "Our hearts are glad" or something like that.

I liked the repetition of the line "His heart is sad." It was very effective and made everything fit together well.

Beautifully done! You've put a wealth of truth into a clear, straight-to-the-heart-and-mind poem! Bravo!
This reminds of the hymn, "He." The message is very similar.
I always loved that song, so it was easy for me to love your poem, too. Good rhyme, and good message. Well done.
A good reminder of the way we should try to live so His heart is glad, instead of sad.
A heartfelt message to embrace and lead us closer to Him. Perfect in every way!
Beautiful poem!
Great repetition and great imagery! Well done ^_^
Yes, amen! So true. Well written. Sometimes we forget just how sad God must feel when mankind flits life away and destroys what God has created.I really like this one hon.
Very nicely written.
Your title says it all. What a bittersweet and wonderfully written poem. Good job. ^_^
We took the same approach this week on this topic - I really like the way you were able to capture it so meaningfully in poetic form.
Wonderful job.
You did a great job of expressing the sadness God feels in this poem. Great writing.
I loved the repetition. This was a great message woven throughout.
This is wonderful! It was so moving and convicting to hear the things that make God sad. Great job.
This is such a good entry. I so wish it had won; it's that good. Your poetry flows so beautifully without being forced and it's such a pleasure to read! Very well done, my friend.