The Official Writing Challenge
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You've got some great lines in here, and the story is delightful! Your dialogue didn't seem to flow very well - could have been the joking way they were talking, and purposeful, but it definitely felt strained to me. Love your characters, though - and this was a nice read.
Very, very, nice piece of writing. Comfortable reading, easy style, one little boo-boo but you probably have already discovered it (no biggie, though). I think I'll put you in my "favorite authors" and read some more of your work!
Cute story. Well written. Liked the humor.
I enjoyed this story immensely. I loved the reality presented. It's very clever and witty.