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Topic: Purposefulness (Purpose in Life) (05/25/06)
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TITLE: The Woman, the People, and the Lamb | Previous Challenge Entry
By Rachel Rudd
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I must arrive on time and not a sec’ too late,
While smiling as students request play dates.
Serve buns and popcorn to students so loud,
Followed by a clean-up of the messy crowd.
Get the pupils to play nicely with each other,
Then make sure each gets home to their mother.
To please my Friends
I must call often and e-mail each day,
While pledging to think of them as I pray.
Invite those close to eat by candlelight,
Followed by an amusing, fun night.
Say goodnight when the evening’s done,
Then urge to meet once more under the sun.
To please my Children
I must sit on the floor and play with trains,
While reading books about pink princess brains.
Serve spaghetti and bread by six o ’clock,
Followed by a dessert of choco’ lot.
Fill the bathtub with toys to their small heads,
Then say g ‘night with stories by their beds.
To please my Husband
I must write notes of love from his own sweet,
While making a lunch of rye bread and meat.
Serve lamb, steak, or pork for dinner in pounds,
Followed by dessert of sweet lemon rounds.
Give massages on shoulders and a back,
Then let him sleep so no rest he will lack.
To please my Jesus
I must wait and be my self at His throne,
While surrendering my will to His own.
Serve others with much gratitude and love,
Followed by loads of praise to Him above.
Give all to purposes He made me for,
Then work to His praise and see what’s in store.
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Now I'm stuck with a problem: how to get this out of my head so I can keep on critiquing...I think it's time for an afternoon snack!
Well done!
I liked the structure and the rhyming format; the meter was not as flow-y as it could be, but a few tweaks would take care of that.
The last verse bears reading again and again.