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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: STARS (07/28/22)
Still gazing at the sky, the little girl slowly sat down on the back porch step. She hugged her bent knees after pulling them up under her skirt.

The night air was perfect with its refreshing summer breezes, so she wasn’t cold. She was hugging her knees to enjoy the feeling of contentment and coziness it brought her as she watched the twinkling stars.

She studied them intently as they twinkled and chirped. She loved the sound they made as they twinkled, and was mesmerized by the little blinks of color she thought she could sometime see as the stars twinkled. She loved the sound it made. It made her think of the Bible verse her pastor had just read to them tonight at their Sunday evening meeting. He had grabbed her attention when she heard him say that the stars sing!

Her curious mind wondered if that was what she was hearing… the stars all singing together!

Her thoughts were broken by the sound of her mother’s voice calling her.Evelyn! Where are you? It’s way past time for you to be in bed!

Evelyn was enjoying her thoughts and gave a sigh of disappointment as she slowly raised to her feet and turned to go in. She reached for the doorknob and answered, Here I am Mommy. I’m coming.

From then on, she enjoyed listening to the stars each time they decided to “sing” as they twinkled. But that all changed the evening Evelyn and her mom were gazing at the stars. It was then, while still a small child, she began learning that at times things are not as they seem.

She shared with her mom how she liked to hear the stars twinkle.

Her mom looked puzzled as she asked, What do you mean? The stars don’t make a sound when they twinkle.

It was now Evelyn’s turn to be puzzled. Yes they do, Mommy. Listen. You can hear them now.

Evelyn’s mom grew quiet as she tried to hear what her daughter’s young mind was interpreting as the stars twinkling.

She soon began to smile, and gave a happy laugh. Looking at her daughter, she whispered, Evelyn, what you’re hearing are the crickets chirping!

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"Chirping Stars" is fiction created around a reality. As a small child my inquisitive thoughts had led me to believe the stars chirped, until someone corrected my conclusion. But even today I still enjoy the thought of the stars chirping! I hope you too come to enjoy the thought with me.
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Jody Day 
08/04/22
Lovely! Oh to be a child again with the wonder and awe of imagination and purity! Thank you for this.

Just a wee comment about extra words: 'so she wasn't cold' possible not necessary, and 'hugged' would be better than 'was hugging' to avoid passive verbs.

I really enjoyed this:0
Marlene MCPherson
08/04/22
Lovely piece, surprised ending.
Marlene MCPherson
08/04/22
Lovely piece, surprised ending.
C D Swanson 
08/04/22
Loved this!
Would be a great story for little children to be read at bedtime!
Great job,
Blessings~
Terry R A Eissfeldt 
08/05/22
Really enjoyed this.

Blessings
Laurie Bahlke
08/08/22
Your piece made me smile broadly! I love the innocence of children and that you could recount your story and share with us. I will remember your story the next time I hear crickets and/or look out at the stars. I think I will also read your story to my granddaughters!