The Official Writing Challenge
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A sad tale with glimmer of hope at the end and nicely written. Paragraphs would have helped immensely.
10/09/09
Very evocative and atmospheric...the formatting is a bit off-putting, though.

If you use MS Word, just type in block paragraphs (like this comment), with extra "enters" between paragraphs.

I enjoyed reading this, and hope to read more from you in the future!
Not much that I can say that hasn't been said already. Paragraphs would definitely help, and your descriptive writing really gsve me a good mental picture of that old worn out red door. The conclusion seemed kind of abrupt, but this piece held my attention and was fun to read.

I think you did a good job with this, and I encourage you to keep writing. You can only keep getting better every week that you enter the challenge. :)
10/13/09
I'm trying to figure out if the red door was a symbol of the Christ being door. Anyway, although descriptive, the description went on to long. Your point was made several lines back. Keep writing.