The Official Writing Challenge
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Fun and interesting way to share a lesson.
03/22/05
Very cute. I could imagine the scene. Your dialog was well thought out and believable. I like the use of the hat. Enjoyed it, thanks!
03/24/05
Cute! Kids can teach us some good lessons, can't they, as they experience life fresh and 'innocent', even in things such as asserting leadership and the next one picking up where one left off! I was very relieved to hear that Paul's distress was only caused by a spider web - phew!! Well written.
I loved these little characters! What you did exceptionally well was capture the voice and heart of toddlers. Good writing!
03/26/05
What a talent! You were able to get the reader beyond the words of the story into visualizing the events in their mind. The story took on a life of it's own. Loved the ending. Precious.