The Official Writing Challenge
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I couldn't help but gasp audibly! Very well-sritten.
Yikes! Quite a story. Very well written.
Good story! It was alittle hard getting into in the beginning sentence or so, but once past that, the story was told effectively. Thanks!
Once I reached the action you had me hooked. I agree that a stronger opening would help.

I can identify with the awful experience of scarring someone for life.
You had me chuckling as I could see you two fighting over that spoon...I stopped though, when I saw someone got hurt. I liked the way you tied this up at the end, too. God bless you.
Ouch! What a interesting beginning...