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The double spacing at the beginning threw me off a bit -however: in the final stage I kept wondering if Jesus would have handled the "getting rid of a friend" as this character did in your story? Just a thought that ran through my mind. Thank you for sharing.
I liked it, it was an easy read. However I don't think the Lord would've handled a friend like that. But I think I know what you were trying to say.
Lila's a brand-new Christian--perhaps in chapter two she'll reach out to her friend again. You wrote these two characters very well, with distinct personalities. Good job.
The characters and voices are very authentic and I like how you captured them; whilst I agree to a point with some of the above comments about how Jesus would deal with a situation with a 'false friend', it has made me re-think a situation in my past with a 'false friend' - so thank you and God bless.