The Official Writing Challenge
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01/23/06
And then.....? This is like having the last page missing of a novel you've been reading!! You left the Reader hanging out on a limb...but it WAS suspenseful, was a page turner, and was well written. But this Reader leaves here feeling cheated. (Smile)
01/26/06
I love the ending--you've given your reader the privilege of determining what happens next. Wonderful writing here.
01/28/06
Well done, and left us hanging!
01/28/06
How often we force God to bring us to the end of our tether before we turn in humility to him! You portrayed you character's journey in a way that gripped my attention. Great sense of place. I live in the tropics and have never experienced that sort of intense cold, except through the skillful use of words by someone like you. Yeggy
01/29/06
Very visual, lots of action ... kept me reading through the whole piece.

My two concerns. 1. Some repetative words. ie: You used "snow" a lot. 2. White space. The paras were all the same size and blocked in. Makes it a harder read.

Aside from that, I think we really see your skills in this work. Very strong!
01/29/06
Was right there with him trying to survive! So - okay - when's part two? :)'Space' should do! Exciting read!