The Official Writing Challenge
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10/21/16
Your subject flows logically but I felt the observations were not so original. I wonder if exploring the correlating roots a little more would have added interest? The title felt a little judgemental to me.
12/11/16
I liked how you correlated the two ideas of flabby unhealthy flesh with ineffective Christianity and ended with a reasonable encouraging solution. Well done and congratulations on your level win.