The Official Writing Challenge
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Thanks for entering the challenge. You may want to use a Thesaurus for alteranate words for zest, et al. Too much "zest" loses its appeal and sounds repetitive. I hope to encourage you with my words, not discourage. I pray this feedback is taken in the spirit of one writer trying to help another writer. Keep writing.
This was a creative entry, with a nice touch of humor. I really enjoyed it. True, you could have used some other words instead of repeating "zest", but in this story it was not as objectionable as in the previous entry.
I liked your story and I could tell that you tried very hard writing it. I feel for your MC who is wheelchair bound and I am sure many people can identify with her.

All the best. :)
You were on topic and brought forward a good story line. I enjoyed it.

God bless~