The Official Writing Challenge
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11/11/10
Aww! This story made me smile! I love the personalities of the characters. I am curious now, about the nationalities of each. I immediately assumed the mother was British, but with the comment about the daughter's accent, am wondering what accent her daughter does speak. :)
11/11/10
It was a good idea to have Katie finish the application. Besides showing her approval, she would not have the same inhibitions in filling in the final comment. Good job.
A tender loving story and the characters are priceless. I enjoyed this very much. I love reading all entries in my group. I learn so much. Thank you for sharing.
11/12/10
This was a delightful tale, one that developed gently and full of humour. I couldn't quite work out how old the daughter was. What she wrote on the form and in the email was lovely but too mature for a ten-year-old so I'm guessing that she was 10 at the time of the bereavement and therefore was now 16. Keep it up, you're doing well.
11/12/10
Your article has a creative take on the subject and portrays a good relationship between mother and daughter. I did notice that, your should have been you're in couple of places. I really enjoyed reading this.
11/12/10
Apology! I DON'T SEE ANY YOUR FOR YOU'RE. SORRY MUST HAVE HAD DOUBLE VISION.
Great characterization and a story that kept me hopping right along. Mothers and daaughters have cool relationships. Great job.
Excellent story. Couldn't stop reading. This could be a peak experience in your own journey.You are up there anyway!
11/14/10
That Katie is intelligent and perceptive. I loved the crossword theme and the mother/daughter banter. This is a great story!
Great job! I enjoyed your story, especially the ending. You made your characters come alive, not an easy thing to do in 750 words. :) I also liked how you worked the crossword puzzle into your story. It made it seem real.
11/15/10
Great entry! I especially like the ending. Katie's message to her mom made me well up.
Congratulations! :D You did great!
Yes! Yes! Yes! Well done Colin. You are a really talanted writer. So delighted for you.