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I like this story tucked inside a devotional. Good illustration of the topic with grace sprinkled in....
I enjoyed this devotional. You picked a great subject for the topic!
Super illustration of the proverb.

Only a few minor things that you might want to change: avoid exclamation points in the narrative, and "at the time" need not be hyphenated.

I could almost hear the sounds of the skating and the hockey sticks. Very nice.
Nice devotional for children, good job.
I've already commented, but I just stopped by to add: your avatar is the cutest thing I've ever seen!
You had some good descriptions and humor in this fun devotional. Great title too!
I always have to count my fingers when I think about ice skating.

This a great intergenerational devotional- an all too rare a thing. Well done.
Ice brothers-what a good title. I liked how you wove the lesson/topic in with learning to skate. Reminds me of teaching little kids to skate-without crashing into the stero set! Nice job. ^_^
What a neat devotional with a lot of wisdom. It is perfect for pre-teens. Great work on this.