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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Angry (08/02/07)
I watch the video again. There she is, grotesquely overweight. She could easily stand to lose eighty pounds. Her eyes carry the telltale signs of health in decline. No longer sparkling with energy and life, the dark circles portray the strain from carrying around her massive bulk. She sickens me. How could anyone let themselves get in such a shape as she did? She doesn’t even walk normal any longer. Her movement is more of a waddle than a stride. The merest exertion leaves her gasping for breath and covered with sweat. It rolls down her face and drips in a steady stream from her chin.

I remember her back when she was lean. Her eyes sparkled with life and just a hint of mischief. Laughter was always escaping her lips. She would take off and walk for hours or ride her bike around the circumference of the town, just because she wanted the exercise. Working hard made her feel good inside. Enthusiasm for life and living it to the fullest bubbled out of her and infected everyone she touched. She was so alive, back then.

Now, her body strains to complete the easiest of tasks. She hurts all the time from the injury her body is suffering from carrying all that extra weight around. Why did she do this to herself? I’m so angry at her that I choke with bile at the thought of even seeing her. How could she allow this to happen?

With disgust I push away from the computer screen that is playing the video. I can’t stand to see that horrid woman another moment. I am sickened by the very sight of her. I head to the back of the house to watch the television and see what is on. I’d do anything right now just to get away from the sight of her.

To my disgust, I meet her in the hallway. Her eyes show me the reflection of her anger. I can’t bear that stare, what I see in her eyes. I can’t stand up under its oppressive weight any longer, so I turn my face away from the mirror.

I know I do not possess the power to forgive this woman, and only God can free me from this anger. He is the only one powerful enough to loose me from the bondage of this kind of hatred. Therefore, I will seek Him for my deliverance and I will beg Him to show me how to love this woman that I hate.
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Joanne Sher 
08/09/07
This absolutely sent chills up my spine - your emotion, your passion, is amazingly evident. Love the last line too.
Betty Castleberry
08/09/07
Very good description. I could feel the MC's self hatred. Good reminder, too, that we have to love ourselves first, so that others may also.
Jan Ackerson
08/10/07
This is GOOD. From its stratling title, to its fantastic conclusion, every word was gripping.
Lynda Schultz 
08/11/07
Great work. Knowing God loves us just the way we are gives us the freedom to love ourselves the way we are — and then to take all the steps we can to preserve the temple of the Holy Spirit in the best conditions possible.
Marilyn Schnepp 
08/13/07
I knew the MC was talking about herself - and I could feel the disgust, the hatred and anger. There are no problems too big for God. There is Hope. Well written!
Joy Faire Stewart
08/14/07
Oh, the emotion in your descriptions...so vivid! Awesome writing.
Catrina Bradley
08/14/07
Great descriptions, great emotions - good from the beginning to the fabulous ending. Thanks for sharing this important message.
Dianne Janak
08/15/07
I liked this for more reasons than the art form and skill. The content was so relateable, and I get it. Loved the ending as a reminder of God's love.. thanks from my heart to yours.
Kristen Hester
08/15/07
This is so powerful and moving. I could feel the hate and anger. Excellent, excellent writing!
Loren T. Lowery
08/15/07
Great message here. As hard and contrary as it might seem, we must first learn to love ourselves if we are ever to produce good fruit for others.
Dee Yoder
08/15/07
How many times have I said the same things to myself-over many issues I'm upset with myself about. Your entry is full of honesty. I'm going to be thinking about this story every time I start to berate myself, and pray for God to teach me to love the soul HE sees in me.
Patty Wysong
08/15/07
Great job!! You conveyed her anger and disgust and showed us who the woman was without breaking the flow or the feeling. Super! Hugs!!
Verna Cole Mitchell 
08/15/07
What an excellent article you have written to show anger and self-defeat. I have looked unhappily into the mirror with angry thoughts before, as well. You brought out her thoughts excellently in this very emotional piece.
Julie Arduini
08/16/07
Just when I think your writing can't get any better---it does. This is probably my favorite of yours yet, and I have enjoyed them all. This was haunting but so well done and something I can relate to all too well. Amazing!
Jacquelyn Horne
08/16/07
I could feel the self-hatred here. It was evident in the writing.
Seema Bagai
08/17/07
Enjoyed this piece. Your descriptions are vivid and you captured the MC's anger in a real way.