The Official Writing Challenge
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Troubling teen stories. There seems to be a great need for these (to our shame). But it needs to be voiced. I liked Kallie's pause, wanting to forgive, but still realizing that this is greater than just a forgive and forget situation.
Excellent job of capturing the angst in your MC's mind. Wow.
I remember being 13. You captured the turbulent emotions very well...would like to know what happened later...did she reconcile with her "father"?
A story that probably hits home for lots of teen girls. The ending left me feeling that there needed to be more.
Kallie's feelings and emotions felt very real. I, too, wanted to know what happened next. Nice job. Keep writing.
Your main character is very believable. Your "voice" seemed realistic. I would guess you have been around a 13 year old or two.

The story definitely hooks you. I know with the wording limit it would be hard to delve into the father figure. But it might be worth developing. Just something to think about.