The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow - what a tale! And to think it is true.
Your story would read easier if you broke it into paragraphs. Thanks for sharing this amazing adventure!
A very exciting adventure!

Please consider an additional edit; there are some misspelled words and missing word endings that detract from your message. When the writing is edited, you'll be more likely to keep readers interested, and this story definitely deserves more readership.