The Official Writing Challenge
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Your poem has a strong, relevant message! I really like the "voice" you used throughout the poem. My personal preference would be to see more divisions of verses and a more predictible rhyming pattern. All in all, this is a delightful read. Thanks!
07/16/06
I appriciated the image of the old king. There was something mystical and fantastic about him. I thought it had an old world feel to it.
Very good. The cadre was good for the most part, it had a few bumps, but overall a wonderful piece.
07/17/06
There were some lovely lines in your poem, but I found the rhyming sequence hard to follow. Just when I thought I had found a pattern it all disappeared.