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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Enter (02/27/06)
With great satisfaction,
the Lord saw it all.
He had spoken into existence
all creatures, both great and small.
Just one more creation
to put on this sod,
So precious it was,
it was made in the image of God.
The man and the woman were now
at Eden's center,
God pointed to this garden paradise
and said, Enter.
But soon came the fall
and the curse of sin.
Paradise lost- they could not get in.
God clothed them and sent them away.
The fallen entered a fallen
world that day.
But God so love was so great
that He had a plan.
A plan that could save every
woman and man.
Emmanuel came on that Christmas morn.
He entered our world.
A saviour is born!
The cross and the nails,
had death claimed it's prey?
Just enter the tomb- He is risen today!
Oh Lord it's for me that you
suffered and died
Come enter my heart
and cleanse it inside.
Because of you, Lord,
I can't wait for the day.
When I enter heaven,
forever to stay.
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Christine Dunn
03/06/06
I really like the way you used the word 'Enter'in this poem, to describe the pathway to salvation. Well done.
Nina Phillips
03/07/06
I really liked the way you used the theme Enter in your poem. This was smooth flowing and easy to read. I hit a bump right here though with this sentence:

"But God so love was so great that He had a plan."

A little change here would keep the reader from halting and thinking about what this line really means. Otherwise I truly loved your poem all the way to end. Keep writing! Love ya bunches in Christ, littlelight
Zac James
03/10/06
It was good, but the only thing was, the meter didn't feel like it flowed well to me. Different rhythm schemes are fine, and even good in poetry, but these didn't feel connected.

A good effort though :)>

~Zac
L.M. Lee
03/11/06
what a clever way to "enter" the story of salvation