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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Help (02/20/06)
God, are you there?

Megan sat next to her mother and gripped her hand. “Whatever the results are God will take care of us right?” Megan was very scared.
“You must trust him to do what’s right,” her mother’s typical wisdom. In all the sixteen years of her life Megan could never get a strait answer. Everything her mom said was religious and confusing.
“Mom! Quit with the wisdom and answer my question,” Megan was getting short tempered. She waited a few seconds and got no response.
“Mom! Mom? Earth to mom do you read me,” Megan snapped her frustrated fingers in her mother’s face.
She took a deep sigh before talking “let’s just say I already know the results.”
“How could you, the doctor got them yesterday?” Megan was just more confused.
“My best friend told me,” her mom said with a wink. “Promise me one thing, trust God no matter what happens.”
Megan bit her lip. She felt cornered, how could she tell her mother about her doubt? Then again how could she lie? God was never there for her, not since Dad left, a year ago. In fact, when her mom talked about God Megan thought she sounded crazy.
“How can I trust something that doesn’t even exist?” it spewed out of her angrily.
“I know you’ve had a hard time since Dad left. God’s worried about you. He misses you. He says he loves all your questions.”
Megan rose from her chair “you sound crazy, mom. You always have. Hey, maybe you are crazy and all my life I’ve wanted to be a madwoman!”
Just then the doctor entered “Megan, could I speak with my patient alone?”
“That’s o.k., I’m just leaving,” she said slamming the door behind her. Megan fumed, pacing outside the doctor’s office. Her mom was talking like she was already dead, or close to. Megan wanted to believe her mother but the past year tugged at her mind.
“God, are you there? Um… I haven’t done this in a long time. But you know that, you know everything? Why did Dad leave? Why is Mom so content? Why, when her death looms so near? How can she have so much faith with so little? How can I have that faith?” she prayed.
“There’s my Megan with her questions. You’re talking to me, so you have all the faith you need. Your mother trusts me. You mom is scared inside. Her peace comes from me for you,” something inside Megan told her. Slowly it grew louder and she knew it was God.
The next thing Megan know she was crying on the floor with her mom’s warm arms around her. “I knew you’d come back to God.”
“Your going to die aren’t you Mommy?” Megan asked looking like a scared five year old.
Her mother drew her in closer “my body will be on this earth for a long time, Cancer free.”
“You knew all along didn’t you? Why’d you lie?” Megan was swinging back to anger.
“Yes, I knew but I did not lie. You assumed that I’d die. I only gave you a little nudge back to God. So what about some ice cream to celebrate our live?”
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Jan Ackerson
03/03/06
What a wonderful, faithful mother! I've had a similar scare, and I didn't face it nearly so well.

It's obvious that you paragraphed this correctly, but in FW universe, an extra "enter" at the ned of each paragraph will put that lovely white space between them.

Lovely story, full of grace.
Virginia Gorg
03/03/06
An interesting way to bring someone back to the Lord. Nicely written, attention holding. One suggestion - please put white space between paragraphs for reading ease.
Jeffrey Snell
03/05/06
A powerful moment and turning point in the daughter's life. Here transitions were a bit abrupt (even for a teenager). You portrayed her frustration at not being in control very well. Good effort!
Shari Armstrong 
03/06/06
Some really great dialog here. Some proofreading (and lines between paragraphs/speakers for an easier read) and this will be even better. Very real characters -I really liked it :)