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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: BROKEN (12/06/18)
Growing up with a challenge was not very easy for me. As a child I was a shy child who kept to herself. I did stuff with the other kids such as dodge ball or jump rope. Other times during recess I kept to myself. During my spare time I drew a lot of pictures. I made up some drawings with grass, trees, and flowers. I still do a bit of drawing but not as much.



I was often bullied by the boys in my class or the other students during recess. I was often called "retarded" or dumb. I liked to sit at the back of the playground until the bell rang. Other times I played baseball with a few of the other girls in the class.



When I entered high school, I was punched in the head by a guy in my class for no apparent reason. I had hit him back a couple of times. I still think about that today, and how mad I felt. This boy called me ugly. I was just getting over the acne stage.



When I was in grade 12, I started to drink, and feel suicidal because I didn't know what to do after high school. I had some learning difficulties, but at least I passed grade 12. I failed a few subjects such as math and biology, but a passed a few other courses successfully.



I started college a few years later, and I started to feel good about myself. I took a typing course followed by a computer course. I also took a few courses in creative writing. I eventually received a certificate in arts and science.



My wounds have healed a lot. Other times I feel broken, and stressed when I deal with family issues. I pray for the lord for help.
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Graham Keet 
12/13/18
Is this perhaps a true life-story? I get the feeling something is missing. One can understand why the person feels broken, but I'm sure that her prayers must have been answered, even in small ways. It would be interesting to hear about this.

Keep on writing!
Bonnie Kronberger 
12/13/18
You did a good job of telling your story. Tension at the beginning turned to encouraging success. Keep praying and trusting in the Lord to be with you through life’s journey.
Marlene Custer 
12/14/18
If this is a true story I am sorry for your hurt. Keep focusing on Jesus to bring complete healing. You have great potential in writing.
Jennifer Hill
12/14/18
I think your writing could heal many others. Too many kids today are hurt by bullying. Your writing piece is raw and you bare all so both sides can see for themselves your story. They can see themselves in it too I believe. Whether they are the ones hurting or the ones doing the hurting.

Please keep writing. Keep being Brave and don't give up. God never gives up on us.
Claudia Barrington
12/14/18
You precious child of God! I was also quiet and shy as a child. You are well on your way to overcoming and others who are hurting will be able to follow your example.

One sentence I thought could be written differently is this one:
"As a child I was a shy child who kept to herself." You might like the sound of it better if it was written like this: "I was a shy child who kept to myself." (It's a small change. See which way you like it better.)

Thanks for sharing your encouraging story. And the Lord will help you. He is already helping you. He never leaves you, and feels everything you feel. One day He will look you in the eyes, wipe away your tears, wrap you in His arms, and say to you, "Well done."
Louis Detweiler 
12/14/18
Life has many trials and tribulations. Keep writing. I think if you say your writing outloud after you write it you might find ways to improve it. I like the path you are on.
Linda Lawrence 
12/19/18
Writing our stories can be very healing. This is a good start. You got the facts laid out. And I hope some of the pain is lessening as you heal. (I'm assuming this is true.) Now I encourage you to distance yourself from being the wounded one and look at your story from a story tellers perspective. Play around with the first sentence, the first paragraph. This sounds like a first draft, and I'm sure you can turn this into a piece that can give hope to others with similar wounds.