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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: EMBARRASS(ED) (11/03/16)
In the summer of July 2015 we went to Algonquin Park for one night. We had difficulty getting accommadation at a hotel or at a motel. One hour later, we lucked out at getting a room at motel room which was attached at a variety store. The room was nice and cozy.

During the day we took a walk on a few trails in the woods. We had fun, but it was hot outside, so we went to get something to eat at the restuarant beside the lake. The food was very good, and we thought that the prices were reasonable. We shopped at a few stores, and then we bought some "Off" spray sot that we won't be bit.

The next day we went to an art gallery. We all enjoyed looking at the art work, so I bought myself a pencil to sketch with. Sometimes I sketch objects, and people, but not very often.

An embarrassing episode took place at the shop beside the art gallery. I bought myself a cup of coffee, and was talking to the cashier about my interest in doing art work. As I was pouring in some cream and suger in the coffee cup, I realized that I poured it into her coffee cup that she purchased from "Tim Hortons." I felt to bad that I had to give her the coffee that my I bought for myself. I still bad what I have done, but I know that God forgave me, but I felt that I made it up to the cashier by buying her a cup of coffee.
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Larry Whittington
11/14/16
This is an interesting life story. We, each, have done embarrassing things that are just accidents and are not planned.

I found a few extra words that made the flow of the story a little broken. Read the story, one word at a time, and see if you can find them.
Ann Stocking
11/14/16
This would make a delightful little story by adding some dialogue, rounding out your descriptions and action, and building up to your embarrassing faux pas. (At least you didn't tip over the cup, as I did once, all over my friend and her daughter.) Keep writing!
Bonnie Bowden 
11/17/16
I once spilled a half of pot of coffee on a woman's white dress at a church dinner, so I can imagine your embarrassment. Unfortunately, accidents do happen.

I think you should begin in the art gallery in Algonquin Park and use dialog to build up the conflict. The 2nd paragraph is unnecessary because it doesn't relate to the coffee incident in any way.

Keep writing! Try to read the Editors Choice winners each week to get new ideas.