The Official Writing Challenge
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04/11/09
The message of hope is very strong in your story.

I was confused by parts of it--the narrator seemed to be happily married, but then he spoke of being separated. I wasn't sure who was speaking, and when, because of inconsistent use of quotation marks.

With some editing, this heartfelt story will be inspirational to many.