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I like the twist of forgivness conquers all, that's just great! I love it! It was a little rough in the beginning, because I wasn't sure if it was Laura's thoughts, the ones with "Jimmy, gone" etc. If you use italics, that helps to separate them out. Otherwise, this was a very realistic story in the happy ending that sometimes never comes-but someday, if there's an ending like this one-there'll be a happy reunion! ^_^ Nice job.
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