The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/06
You chose a very apt Scripture for this topic. When you edit this piece, you might consider focusing on only the aspects having to do with the title.

Also, watch POV--in the last long paragraph, it sounds as if believers are going to sit with you in heaven, not with Jesus.

Thank you for this word of hope!
01/17/06
I noticed that also about the transition a little mix-up, and agree with Jan. However I truly enjoyed the thought, and how you presented your article. Nice job! God bless ya, littlelight