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Topic: Exhale (08/15/13)
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TITLE: Silver Lining | Previous Challenge Entry
By Taci Sveda
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And the weather takes it’s toll
Breathing becomes labored
As the winds rip out your soul
This storm is getting stronger
The end is very near
The Earth is crying louder
Should we begin fear
This question can be haunting
And a reality hard to face
But if you know the truth
God’s blessed you with His grace
The Bible is the source of reason
God’s Word is full of detail
With peace and understanding
We are able to exhale
There is a silver lining
And the sun begins to shine
Breathing now comes easy
And No longer do we pine
With Christ as our Savior
The Spirit makes us whole
Filling us with wisdom
As He serenades our soul
Protected from this climate
As beacons we glow bright
Lighting up the pathway
Steering others from the night
Our doors are left wide open
So it’s Jesus that they see
Inviting in the stranger
The Gospel sets them free
Praise be to our Father
The Master makes the call
It’s victory for His kingdom
That He’s promised to us all
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Be careful of the word it's--with an apostrophe, it means it is or it has. You wanted its in your first stanza. Similarly, I'd encourage you to use more punctuation in your poem. Traditional rhymed and metered poetry is typically punctuated just as prose is, and I think that would make improve your poem's flow.
I like the way you incorporated this week's prompt, and your poem was quite lovely.
God bless~