The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/05
Very good:) I might drop the exclamtion points though. Keep writing.
11/01/05
The abcb rhyme scheme worked well, although counting the poem was difficult. I agree with above, the exclamation points are not needed.
blessings - dub
11/02/05
I agree, the poem was sweet, but when I came to the exclamation it stopped the beat. Very nice though. God bless ya, littlelight
11/03/05
A couple of "forced" rhymes, but they really don't take away from the charm of this little poem. Lots of delicious smells here.
11/05/05
This is a cute, sweet poem. Very good; I liked it. Thanks for sharing.