The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/09
Reminds me of my childhood.This is a nice devotional piece.
10/11/09
I love devotionals that start with a personal story--it's a really good way to draw in your readers.

I didn't understand why the dad asked "Who wrote their name...?" If it was their name, wouldn't it be obvious who did it?

That was just a minor quibble in a well-written devo.
10/13/09
what a good peice! I loved this story and it was structured nicely. I liked the red car the red blood and then summing up with Jesus blood shed for us.!
Maybe just add a paragraph of spacing or two!