The Official Writing Challenge
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03/06/08
Very good writing! If you ever want to expand this, think about giving your readers a peek into some more of the conversations between Beth and Patti. It'll develop their personalities just a tad more. This is a really good entry.
 
03/07/08
Oh Boy! My 13 year old son and I just read your piece. Sounds so familiar. I love the way God instanly changes circumstances and brings a happy ending!
Write on!
03/07/08
Crafted Descriptive Beautiful written Prayer message. A Joy to Read. God bless, Helen Harris

Some beautifully descripive words here! Very touching story. More dialog and showing us rather than telling us would have really made your story that much more amazing!
03/11/08
What a wonderful principal!
It's not easy being a parent and we need all the encouragement we can get.
It would help the reader if you made a new paragraph with each new speaker.
I wondered how it worked out for the son. I'm glad it turned out on a happy note for the mother.