The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/08
Heart-breaking, yet a perfect demonstration of this week's theme.

This piece would be much stronger if edited for grammar errors; I especially noted some missing suffixes and misspelled words. Perhaps a second pair of eyes to look at your work?

Your title says it all, doesn't it?
02/02/08
This is right on topic. Good job! You do need to get someone to proofread your work. Keep on writing!
Laury
Wow, lots of emotion here. I was so with her, wishing that she wouldn't chose him and would get out of the situation. Good job!

At the end, there are two typos, "Kill" should be "killed" and "distory" should be "destroy" otherwise, this is some pretty deep stuff! ^_^
Nice job on a very difficult topic. :)