The Official Writing Challenge
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Mothers understand fear of the dark is something most children experience. Your story was good to demonstrate symbolically that most of our fears evaporate in light of the safe familiar voice of our Heavenly Father.

You might want to check your verb tenses for consistency, but good use of dialogue. More white space helps too, for easier reading.

Very nice story~
Oh, those back-yard camp outs! You captured it well.