The Official Writing Challenge
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Good story. Good moral.

Quite a few typos. Another person recently suggested a good idea...that writers have their articles proofed before submitting.
I like your entry. I think you have a vision here of a future world that I didn't quite understand. We often get so close to our writing that we don't see that an outsider might not be able to share in what we see.

The verb tense and typos do make it a little harder to read through, but that being said, it gave the piece almost a sweet innocence. I liked the idea of unlocking links to get to the room, and your character's sudden realization that the laughter always heard in the room was actually only that elder was a good line.

I think you could expand this a little more and give us more details, more insights into your vision of this world, and it would heighten the reader's enjoyment of it. Kudos to you, and keep writing. Much promise here.