The Official Writing Challenge
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This is very moving, and uplifting as a message. And I really enjoy your descriptive writing style. I loved several lines, especially "Clouds separated and soft background of blue sky welcomed the ballons that were lofting into the breezq of the heavens," and this phrase "ribbon tenderly unraveled from my unwilling hand." I think I might even title the piece, "Ribbon Tenderly Unraveled." I think your piece hasn't been read and commented on mostly, because you didn't put a line space between each paragraph, giving the reader's eyes some rest places; same thing I didn't do with my piece, which also didn't get read or commented on (except once.) We'll do better with white spaces next time! Great piece, I really enjoyed reading it. Vicki
04/24/05
This was beautiful, full of heartfelt emotion. I love to see God heal the heart from shame.