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TITLE: Why You Hate Me
By Sophia Flot-Warner
07/24/06
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This uses a lot of imagery, I want to make sure it's understandable. The title fits, but could it be, should it be gentler.
You hate me because
I am the only human in your realm of existence
That filets the soul of truth
And lays it open before you
This fresh fish
Carries a stench into your nostrils

I refuse to humor your tirades
Am not moved by your tidal of rage
The wave washes over me
Subsides and I am unscathed
Still standing
With that soul in my hands
Laying it open for you

You hate me because
I still hold you accountable for your actions and lack thereof
While everyone else listens and smiles
Saying nothing, yet agreeing, with that silence
And thus damaging you all the more
Just to avoid your splash of venom

In retrospect, the venomous wave appears to have engulfed you long before you
Unleashed it’s fury at me
You emerged injured and have yet to heal
Your wounds prove geysers
That feed the tidals of rage

You hate me because
You fear me
You can’t understand how I continue to breathe calm
As your waves crash over me
Never gasping for air
Never forming waves of my own to turn yours back
But instead I speak quiet disagreement
I stand composed, supernaturally steadfast
Holding that freshly filleted truth
Laying it open for you

I hear that filet of soul is good for healing the soul
You should eat your fill
And wash it down with the healing waters from the River of Life
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