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Supermaket Ambush

by Melanie Kerr 
03/22/08
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Megan stared at the stain, horrified.

She had been carefully navigating her way through the busy crowds of shoppers when a woman, dressed in pink, smiling before a washing machine, threw a cocktail of red wine, beetroot juice and tomato ketchup over her white blouse.

“Zippo! The washing powder that’s guaranteed to keep your whites white!”

A crowd watched in anticipation as Zippo spectacularly failed to live up to its guarantee.






Megan stared at the stain, horrified.

She had been carefully navigating her way through the busy crowds of shoppers when a loud crack sounded above the noise. A small red flower budded and blossomed just above her heart.

Two people fell. Megan, folding gently down to the floor and a young teenager wrestled to the ground by two burly men, rifle wrenched from his grasp.

The future held no promise for either of them.

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Pat Guy
25 Mar 2008
Wow Melanie, you're great at this! Each one was awesome!
Janice Cartwright
25 Mar 2008
Image evocative on the first and disturbingly disturbing on the second. Wow! Great writing.
Holly Westefeld
24 Mar 2008
From very funny, to very stark. Excellent contrast.
Glynis Becker
23 Mar 2008
Great job on two totally different pieces with the same setting. Wonderful!
Kristen Hester
23 Mar 2008
The mood these set are polar opposites for sure. Wow. Great writing and word choices. Super.
Tim Pickl
22 Mar 2008
Zippo! I love it.
Sally Hanan
22 Mar 2008
The first one was fabulous. I loved the description of her blood in the second and the despair of her spiritual state.
Hanne Moon 
22 Mar 2008
The first one was hysterical! And the second very poignant. Good job! :D
Jan Ackerson
22 Mar 2008
Excellent! You had me laughing out loud, then swallowing my laugh in a gulp. Both stories had spectacular endings...with a major bite.
Lyn Churchyard
22 Mar 2008
WOW Melanie, both of those packed a whallop. Superjob!

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