The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, I like this. Wasn't expecting the ending, and now I'm wondering just who the poison is for... this needs a sequel!
This is so real--so tragic. I could feel the hopelessness of the MC, along with the only way she thought she could end her misery. You did an outstanding job with characterization here through the dialogue.
The man can write!

Spot on with the dialog and I would love reading chapters of a good crime novel.

I have written a couple of unpublished detective mysteries but I do not have the novelist's gift for plotting.

Cracker jack work! Had plenty of spark...
I felt the opening scene (187 words) was a bit of a weak start. In my opinion, that scene (trimmed a little) should come later, after we get to know Dorothy and Sam a bit.

Great use of details.

The dialogue and characterization are amazing!
Excellent dialogue. It revealed the characters very well.
Such hopelessness. Sad on all levels. Great job on this writing. You do have to wonder about that rat poison:)