The Official Writing Challenge
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An enjoyable, realistic story. Good work in this piece.
Brought a lump to my throat, even the second time around reading it. You set the scene expertly and let us see into Allie's teenage soul. I liked how you had Beth entice with a red licorice rope. Cute! Also the sheet of blonde hair was very picturesque. Good advice from Beth at the end. Lovely writing!
Woohoo! Congratulations for the 2nd week in a row! Are you a writer or what? I am so proud of you, sister!
Nice story, a couple of repetitive places, "All week long" ..for example. But overall well written and on topic.
I was back at camp, in the throes of a camp crush. Superb writing, excellent story. My only issue is the end - I wish the counselor would have SANG the line a la Stephen Curtis Chapman. :) Very good job - congrats on your placement!
Thanks everyone for the feedback. It felt very challenging this time, to get the whole message in, using only 750 words. I wanted Beth to say more! And in MY head, she was singing the song. :)
Congrats. This was a good piece. I could relate somewhat. I was somewhere between the 2 girls, not a flirt but not afraid to talk to boys.