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This had a very good, clear message. I like how you portrayed you MC's goodbye to her old ways.
Very well written. Has a great spiritual message as well.
Your title summed up your romance well. I really liked how her sweetheart waited for her and prayed while she tested herself. Good story!
Great message, perfect title! A very nice romance!
Very moving story. So good to read the firm, spiritual ending.
Great message of tested faith. I think you might have meant stiletto *heel* instead of heal. That's a minor thing, though. Good believable conversation. Very nicley done.
You drew me right in and kept my attention to the end. Great job.
This definitely wowed me - the tension was absolutely palpable. Loved the message too. Great stuff!
Awesome story of grace and committment. I would love to read the rest of the story of her struggle to get to this point, but it is all contained in this short piece that it isn't necessary.
Besides being a good story with a well-woven message, I had to chuckle at the picture you painted with this paragraph:

"...she had reveled in the power shed held over the poor sailors that climbed over tables to get to her first...."
Wow! I really enjoyed this. I think this is one of your best stories ever. I felt like I was part of the scene. Thanks for tossing me a brick. :-)
I really loved the overall message in this story. The romance was definitely there, and a tension was certainly evident. Good dialogue. Very good writing.
It gets better every tie I read it:) Super job, Val. God bless.