The Official Writing Challenge
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I love your 3rd paragraph, with you sitting in the sun. So poignant and sweet!
This was really good.

I'm not sure if word count "got you" or not, but I'd like to see this expanded to tell more of the main character's early childhood. I also don't think you needed that last sentence. It kind of broke the flow you had going.

Great job overall, and a great story. Keep writing!
I loved the 'funny, red curly hair'! ;-)
I wish you could have expanded this more and told us/showed us more about this little girl. What a story she has to tell.
Good job! :-) Hugs!!