It's a very subtle difference in voice. Shann's re-write is very close, but still seems to have an implied narrator who is the true POV character. A 2nd person rewrite might sound something like this:wheelygirl58 wrote:O.k., here I go with 2nd person. . .
"You, yes, you the one who thinks of yourself only speck on that third rock from the sun. Well, I've got to tell you,the first off, I AM the one who created that rock where you reside on and I do not consider you a mere speck! You are a child of Mine along with that, because you believe in My Son, Jesus Christ as your Lord and Savior, you are also My heir! You are very much loved by Me, My dear child! Please, don't forget that. Oh by the way, you know who is THE speck in this cosmos I created? That fallen angel of Mine, Lucifer, his more common name is Satan. Just remember,the great I AM does love you!"
You think of yourself only a speck on that third rock from the sun, never stopping to consider the God who created that rock. You think you are insignificant, but you are significant in the Creator's sight...
I'm typing this on my tiny phone, so I can't easily see your original or Shann's oh-so-close version, but when hers had something like "you need to consider...", that's where its little toe dipped into the "unseen first person" territory.
It might be helpful to consider the words abbreviated by "POV"--Point Of View. When you read the piece, whose spirit/soul/ mind are you seeing? It has to be the "you" character to be 2nd person. Give the story by Leigh MacKelvey that I linked to in the lesson another read--that's a better example than I'm capable of without my computer.
It's tricky, isn't it? Tomorrow's lesson is back in familiar territory.