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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Abundance (06/08/06)
Constellation vibrations
Blaze star-revelations
Renowning the Deity Only—not lonely
But Three.
Awaker, Matchmaker—oh! high gamble-taker
Soil grinning, Love spinning
Earth’s first radiant son

Deceiver exotic
Fabrication necrotic
Chaste mind undiscerning, doubt churning, cheap spurning
Decree.
Trust weaking, air creaking—oh! planet-bones shrieking
Lie stenching, foul wrenching
Fair innocence flown

Pure Lamb-bought libation
Paves ancient foundation
Fierce wounding in Zion, gored heavenly Scion—stout Lion
Who bleeds.
Disguising, surprising —oh! Conqueror rising
Advancing, romancing
Beyond the torn Veil

Light's children borning
Word’s image adorning
Bright spirits trill tidings, confiding, unhiding
Love’s deed.
Crime quivers, guilt shivers—oh! baptismal rivers
De-worming, re-sperming
Confirming faith’s sons

Martyr blood screeching
Stars plunging, beseeching
Rage overboiling, snake coiling, death spoiling
The freed.
Seeking, venge-wreaking—oh! skywonders streaking
Saints wailing, prevailing
Cry due justice down

Trumpet blast shatters
Ripe sin-measure splatters
Thunderous dirging, flames purging, woes urging
One plea.
Suspending, upending all blatant pretending
Word warring, Judge roaring
Avowing His right:
    “With pearl-spangled meanings
    Clear, prophet-lipped keenings
    Announced intervenings
    I’ve groaned to produce
    Testimonies abounding
    Transcendent, resounding
    Proud reason confounding—
    There remains no excuse.”

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“The heavens declare the glory of God;
And the firmament shows His handiwork.
Day unto day utters speech,
And night unto night reveals knowledge.
There is no speech nor language
Where their voice is not heard;
Their line has gone out through all the earth,
And their words to the end of the world.”
--Psalm 19:1-4 (NKJV)

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Sharlyn Guthrie
06/17/06
Good symmetry and great use of assonance and alliteration. Your poem is not an "easy" read, but is worth the contemplation required!
Melanie Kerr 
06/17/06
The vocabulary and word pictures that your poem evoked were excellent. The rhythm once I caught hold of it was steady. Would it not be "trust weakening" rather than "weaking"?
Linda Watson Owen
06/19/06
No, this is not an easy read...but it's packed tight imagery coupled with such broad scope and E.A.Poe-like orchestration of word sounds makes it a wonderful poetic experience when the reader invests the time and effort this poem deserves.
Helen Paynter
06/19/06
Wow - certainly not an easy read, but well worth the effort. You've been highly experimental with your language and I think you've got away with it. Some wonderful words here, and very very tightly crafted. Well done.
Tabiatha Tallent
06/20/06
Loved it!! Didn't have a problem with the rhythm or the read. I thought it was great.
Julia May
06/21/06
I agree with Linda, reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe's work. Magnificent - Abundance personified in our Holy God. In His Love,

Julia
Lisa Vest
06/21/06
Wow! This took a lot of work on your part...I loved the rythm (sp???) Good piece of Master's Poetry!
Edy T Johnson
06/21/06
Wow! dear Sherry, Your poetry is just splendid. How you find just the exact words, and words that also fit both the message and the organized meter and rhyme could be a lesson for the rest of us aspiring poets. This is full of meat for chewing thoroughly.
Beth Muehlhausen
06/21/06
Gasp!! :-)

This is phenomenal. Your word choices are...perfect, creative, compelling, and otherwise PHENOMENAL. Certainly a stand-alone work as I've never read anything like it EVER.

Great job. I can hear the native American flute playing in the background. No kidding.

;-D

Brenda Craig
06/21/06
Wow, such descriptive words, worth reding through again to catch everyting. It layers are worth uncovering.
George Parler 
06/21/06
Excellent word usuage to paint complete pictures with each stroke. I did stumble in the flow a time or two, but it was probably more me than anything. Good job.
Maxx .
06/21/06
another great poem. very good word choices, loved the message. You did very well!
Suzanne R
06/21/06
Wow!

I had to read it through three times ... still so much more I could get with time and attention ... quite amazing.
Sally Hanan
06/21/06
This deserves more than one read, but you certainly have proven with this that you belong in Masters.
Jan Ackerson
06/21/06
I especially liked your last stanza--"no excuse." Astounding writing.
dub W
06/21/06
Masterful poetry. Bravo. Thanks for sharing.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz
06/21/06
Beautifully crafted work of art. Thanks.
Jessica Schmit
06/21/06
Incredible. This was so passionate. It sweeps the reader right off their feet and takes them for an incredible ride. I would be shocked if this didn't place.
Rita Garcia
06/21/06
Once again, you inspire me!
Marty Wellington 
06/22/06
Simply breathtaking! What an extraordinary talent God has bestowed upon you. Blessings.