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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Orange (the color) (11/19/09)
Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

I cry out my desperate plea, knowing I don't have much longer. I must share the information I have gathered. It is vital. If I'm not found, more may die. Please!

Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

I know why the plane went down. I'm the only one who has all the answers. Look for my bright orange hue. Send down your sonar signals so I can send them back. Don't let me die in vain! Don't leave me so long that the murky depths of the ocean make me resemble my given name.

Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

I record so much "mundane" data during a normal flight.... most black boxes don't get to fulfill their ultimate purposes. Not that I ever hoped my plane would go down. No, I never wanted that to happen. But now that it has.... please.

Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

I want to help. Do you see my bright orange casing? Do you hear my mournful cry? Do you?

Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

I heard the pilot's final words. The tense discussion between him and the captain. They knew we were going down. And yet, there was nothing I could do. That is not my purpose. My purpose is for the future; to give the reason behind the wreckage. To give some small purpose to the tragedy. I must not falter. I must not fail.

Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

When they knew they could do nothing more, I recorded the prayers of the cockpit crew. Their words to their families. Will you please let me share it with them? I'm sure it will bring some comfort.

Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

Is that a ship I sense overhead?

Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

Send your sonar down. Let me bounce it back. Let the sonar and me communicate. Let us do our dance!

Ping! Ping! Ping!
Find me! Find me! Find me!

I see the robotic arm. Grab me. I'm right here.

Ping! Ping! Pi....
Find me! Find me! Find...

I come up to the surface. My cries are silenced. Now take me apart. Take out my voice recorder and my data recorder. Analyze me. Let me show you the flaws. Please. I beg of you. Make the needed changes. I will not die in vain. I live and die to save others. It's in your hands now.

I have been found.



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Author's Note:

The so-called "black boxes" on planes are actually orange for visibility. Sometimes the Flight Data Recorder and Cockpit Voice Recorder are combined into one "black box."
http://www.ntsb.gov/aviation/CVR_FDR.htm
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Barbara Culler 
11/26/09
Powerful point of view.I liked the repetition as it really added to the urgency of the situation.
Glad you included the footnote of the black box. I know it is actually orange, but not everyone may know that.
This story should be a winner!
Mariane Holbrook
11/29/09
Well, I learned something from your entry! I didn't know black boxes were orange! What a great piece! Kudos!!!
Catrina Bradley
12/01/09
The "black box" crossed my mind when mulling over story ideas. I couldn't have come up with anything as original as this. Very good!
Colin Swann
12/01/09
Great piece of writing. I too didn't know the black box was orange (sounds daft) lol Colin
Colin Nielsen
12/02/09
Good, tight, and imaginative writing. And you're right. I did learn something new.
Noel Mitaxa 
12/03/09
You have cleverly used repetition to introduce each new step in the story, when it could have very easily bred familiarity and turned your readers off. Skilfully done.